Week 9

04/04/2011 Lesson: Controlling Idea/Theme: Revision of the Essay

Objective: Students will learn the importance of revision in their writing, and the difference between revision and editing. 

Aim: What is the difference between editing and revising?

Skill/Concept: Revision

Materials: Essay Checklist, Thesaurus.com, Transitional Word List

Agenda

Do Now: Use the Essay Checklist to identify if you have included all of the required elements.

Acquisition –
Mini Lesson: Revising is not the same as editing. 

• In editing, you correct grammar mistakes, add or change punctuation, wording. Editing is a clean-up operation.
• In revision, you are looking for ways to improve wording and sentence structure.Revision requires thinking about your paper in a new way. To adequately revise a draft of a paper, you will need to-
  • see it from a different perspective, which is most often the reader’s perspective.
  • understand the meaning perfectly of your own writing. But what did you actually write? Did you explain as fully as you could?
  • clarify your argument/point,
  • add needed material
  • take out things that don’t belong.
  • make sure you have expressed your ideas clearly and thoroughl. . Often you don’t know what you’re really writing about until you’ve written it. Only when you’ve gotten to the end of your draft do you see the point you were making.
  • turn the paper on its head, and put that point at the beginning.
  • make sure that argument/point/topic is followed all the way through.

Essay Checklist for the essay-

Introduction:
___Thesis statement about my book
___Include the title and author of the book I am reading
___Brief Summary

Three Body Paragraphs:
___Three topic sentences for each paragraph
___Supporting detail sentences as evidence to support my topic sentence.
___I have included one quotation in each body paragraph.
___I have provided an explanation for my quotation and explain how it supports my topic sentence.
___ I have analyzed how my examples and quotations support my thesis.
___Each paragraph has a focus: para #1 setting Para#2. characterization Para#3. conflict

Conclusion:
___I have restated my main point (thesis statement) of the essay in different words.
Grammar & Mechanics
____I follow grammatical rules and use correct punctuation and spelling.

Sample Literary Essay:
(Grabber/Hook) Is love purely a feeling – or something more? If each person’s interpretation of love is unique, then how do we know what someone is saying when they say “I love you”? (Author and Title/Brief Summary) In F. Scott Fitzgerald’s The Great Gatsby, we watch the romantic tragedy of the mysterious Jay Gatsby and beautiful Daisy Buchanan through the eyes of Nick, a common friend and young businessman. Their story would make anyone reconsider what love really means. (Thesis Statement) Fitzgerald wrote The Great Gatsby to show that in relationships, love or compassion does not necessarily imply a sense of commitment to a person, and vice versa.

(Topic Sentence)Tom Buchanan is a grown up version of your typical high school jock. (Supporting Details 1)He’s big and strong, but no too smart.(Support Details 2) He’s married to Daisy, but is actively having an affair with a woman named Myrtle Wilson. (Analysis) This relationship is filled with irony: Daisy is beautiful and charming, while Myrtle is neither. It is also ironic that Tom still feels some sort of commitment to his wife, even while with Myrtle. (Retelling/Summary)At a party in Manhattan, when a drunken Myrtle cries out, “Daisy! Daisy! Daisy!... I’ll say it whenever I want to!” (p. 41) Tom actually gets so angry that he strikes her and breaks her nose. (Analysis) Even while choosing to be with Myrtle over his wife, he feels the need to protect his wife. It actually seems that he cares for both women, but does not feel committed to either. 

Meaning Making: Make revisions to your essay using the list below:

1. Reread your essay and use thesaurus.com to change/avoid repetitive words.
2. Look at the structure of your sentences and make necessary improvements.
3. Add at least two or three transitional words: http://jcschools.net/write/transition.htm
4. Make sure your topic sentences relate to your thesis statement.
5. Do you have a clear focus (topic) and is your focus (topic) consistent throughout your essay.
6. Is your wording choice clear?
7. Are there any places you can expand your ideas or add details( by analyzing the evidence or quotation)?
8. Did I include quotes from the book to support my topic sentences?
9. Is all my information needed? Are there phrases or sentences that I should cut ?

Transfer: How does revising help you improve your essay, and your overall grade in class?

HW#18: Read for 30 minutes and annotate while reading. Keep up with your reader's notebook.

04/05-04/06 Acuity Test (will be considered as a test grade)

04/07/2011 2ND Marking Period Unit 2: Poetic Devices

 Pacing Calendar for Unit 2:
- How a writer does it: Metaphors, Simile, Symbolism, Figurative Language, Imagery.
- Expressing and supporting one’s opinion of a book.

Pacing Calendar

| 4/7/2011 Day 1 Similes and Metaphors | 4/8/2011Day 2 Imagery and Alliteration: Sounds and Sights | Day 3 4/11/2011 Symbolism in Literature | Day 4 4/12/2011 Diction, Mood and Choice of words in Literature | Day 5 4/13/2011 Assessment#1 (Writing) How does a writer use literary devices, such as imagery, symbolism, mood, metaphors to convey her or her Controlling Idea? | Day 6 4/14/2011 Poetic Devices #1 | Day 7 4/15/2011Poetic Devices #2 | Day 8 4/27/2011Poetic Devices #3 | Day 9 4/28/2011 Poetic Devices #4| Day 10 Assesment #2 4/29/2011 Poetry Analysis (Writing) Identify three examples of literary techniques and explain why it is used by the poe

Day 1 Lesson: Metaphors and Similes: Figurative Language

Objective: Students will be able to identify similes and metaphors in text and understand their meanings.
Students will know the difference between a simile and a metaphor.

Aim: What is the difference between a metaphor and a simile?

Skill/Concept: Metaphor, Simile

Materials: Mentor Text – The Black Cat by Edgar Allan Poe, Paragraphs 1-8

Agenda

Do Now: Which sentences give a better sense of what the writer is trying convey? Why?
1. In your notebook,
2. Look up the following vocabulary words- a brief definition and part of speech

1. Expound
2. Phantasm
3. Gossamer
4. Sagacious
5. Conspicuous
6. Tinctured

Acquisition – Metaphor and Simile

Part I: Introduction-Mini Lesson: Understanding similes and metaphors is crucial to comprehend figurative language in literature and to enhance writing. Writers use similes and metaphors to give clarity to their writing or to paint a visual picture. Oftentimes the reader has to not only identify the simile or metaphor, but also infer a precise distinction to what is being compared.

 Simile and Metaphor examples: http://www.buzzle.com/articles/similes-and-metaphors-examples.html

Simile: A simile is a figure of speech comparing two unlike things that is often introduced by like or as.

1. Example: This bed is as hard as a rock.
2. Example: My love’s like a red, red rose.
3. What happens to a dream deferred? Does it dry up like a raisin in the sun?

In Literature:Shall I compare thee to a summer's day? Thou art more lovely and more temperate.

Metaphor: A metaphor is a figure of speech in which a word or phrase literally denoting one kind of object or idea is used in place of another to suggest a like-ness between them.

1. Example: Nora is a walking, talking encyclopedia.
2. Example: All the world’s a stage.

 In Literature: Julia's purse was a soft-sided trash bin, filled to the top with bits of used tissues, crumpled papers, and a half-eaten apple.

Part II: Read the short story, "The Black Cat ", by Edgar Allen Poe, and identify examples of similes and metaphors.

1. Number the paragraphs on pages 1 and 2.
2. Read the 1st two paragraphs and describe the POV, setting and tone.
3. Read paragraphs 3-5:
   • Identify the simile in the paragraphs. Explain what it means.
   • For Example, Simile: " …regarded all black cats as witches in disguise".
     Sampler Response: The narrator tells us that from an early age he has loved animals. He and his wife have many pets, including a large black cat named Pluto. The narrator is especially fond of Pluto, even though, there is superstition connected with black cats, which have long connoted evil, bad luck and misfortune. The simile, a lighthearted comment by the wife of the narrator “regarded all black cats as witches in disguise,” foreshadows possible ill fortune that the narrator may experience in the story.
4. Read paragraphs 6 – 8:
   • Identify the metaphor. What is being compared in this metaphor?
   • For example, "The fury of a demon instantly possessed me."
     • Sampler Response: The narrator in his alcohol-induced rage compares himself to an individual possessed by a demon. Generally, someone possessed is described as crazed, mad, and without any control. So, the narrator is totally consumed by his rage; he has lost control and is determined to destroy/hurt the object of his fury.
   • How is alcohol described in the story?
   • How does the character explain his sudden transformation (figurative language)?
   • Can you describe the effect of the metaphor?

Meaning Making: Read your book for 10 minutes and take notes using the following guiding questions:

 Transfer: How would you use figurative language (similes and/or metaphors) to explain how much you love someone/something? Write three sentences explaining to how much you love your friend, parents, pet, etc using figurative language.

HW#18: Read for 30 minutes. Write a paragraph explaining how the author uses metaphors/similes to serve his or her purpose.

04/08/2011 Day 2 Lesson: Imagery and Alliteration (Sound and Sight)

Objective: Students will be able to identify imagery and alliteration in text and understand their meanings.

Aim: Why are imagery and alliteration so important in literature?

Skill/Concept: Imagery and Alliteration

Materials: Mentor Text – The Black Cat by Edgar Allan Poe, Paragraphs 9 - 14

Agenda

Do Now:
1. List some examples of alliteration of team names in sports, for example The Cleveland Cavaliers.

2. Look up the following vocabulary words- a brief definition and part of speech
1. Perverseness
2. Apparition
3. Adjacent
4. Remorse
5. Conflagration

Acquisition – Imagery and Alliteration

Mini Lesson: Part I: Introduction -
Imagery: is a description that appeals to one of the five senses. Using this senses it creates a picture or image for the reader. Imagery is an image, in its basic sense, is something concrete that appeals to any of the five senses - sight, sound, touch, taste, smell - as well as metaphor, simile, and personification.
For example, the following images might be used to describe a stroll on a summer night:

• Sight - a full moon in a black sky
• Sound - the chirp of crickets
• Taste - the tang of a cold glass of lemonade
• Touch - a warm breeze
• Smell - freshly mowed grass

In Literature:

• The eery silence was shattered by her scream.
• After that first sale, his cash register never stopped ringing.
• The sky looked like the untouched canvas of an artist.

Alliteration: is the repetition of a consonant sound at the beginning of words or within words. The words can be right next to each other or spaced out, and generally at least two words are needed for alliteration. Good examples of alliteration are tongue twisters. Alliteration is often used in poetry to create unity and a musical or rhythmic effect.

 Examples: Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers.
A peck of pickles Peter Piper picked
If Peter Piper picked a peck of picked peppers,
How many pickled peppers did Peter Piper pick?
Examples:

• Sweet smell of success.
• She sells seashells by the seashore.

In Literature:
I have stood still and stopped the sound of feet
When far away an interrupted cry
Came over houses from another street
~Acquainted With the Night, Robert Frost~

Part II: Read the short story, "The Black Cat ", by Edgar Allen Poe, and identify examples of imagery and alliteration. See Mentor Text

1. Number the paragraphs on pages 2 and 3.
2. Read passage provided:

• Identify the imagery and alliteration in the text. Explain why the author uses imagery/alliteration in the passage?

 A. Here is an example of Alliteration: "…even beyond the reach of the infinite mercy of the Most Merciful and Most Terrible God".

 Here is a Sampler Response: Based on the passage Poe seems to believe that criminals are inclined to give themselves away not because of guilt but from the anticipated pleasure of defying moral authority. The “M” alliteration by Poe is used to emphasize that the narrator is mocking/relishing in the notion that his crime of hanging Pluto is a sin "beyond the reach of the infinite mercy of the Most Merciful and Most Terrible God."
(Even the fear of god couldn’t stop him)

B. Here is an examle of Imagery: " I was aroused from sleep by the cry of fire".

Here is a Sampler Response: On the night that the narrator has brutally killed his cat in a drunken rage, he is awakened by the sound/cry of fire. Poe uses the imagery of the “cry of fire” to evoke a visual/audio mental image of fire, crying and destroying the narrator’s “entire worldly wealth” in retribution for what was done to Pluto.
(The fire is crying and destroy everything in its path)

3. Read paragraphs 11- 14:

• What does the author want the reader to understand by highlighting the “s” alliteration in the passage?

Here is an example Alliteration: "…same species, and of somewhat similar appearance, with which to supply its place."

Sampler Response: By highlighting the “S” alliteration and choice of words the reader is given the impression that the narrator is obsessed with finding an exact identical replica of his cat, perhaps out of guilt.

Meaning Making:

Read for 10 minutes and take notes using the following guiding questions:

 Transfer: What type of imagery would you use to describe diving into a cool, refreshing pool on a hot summer day?

HW#19: Read for 30 minutes. Write a paragraph explaining how the author of your book uses the five senses (sound, sight, touch, smell, taste) to create a mood through imagery.